IOC Practice
Planning:
IOC RECORDING LINK
Grading:
A: 5- I think I showed a good understanding of the text when explaining the major themes and the context of the passage however I could have incorporated more well chosen references to the text
B: 6- I think I did a good job when explaining the effect on the reader when I discussed how the motif of fate created confusion, but I could have been more detailed.
C: 3- I think generally, the IOC was coherent but I don't think that it was entirely effective.
D: 3- My language was adequate but not formal and I should have used more literary terms when analyzing the text. I also did not reach the time mark because my language was limited.
IOC RECORDING LINK
Grading:
A: 5- I think I showed a good understanding of the text when explaining the major themes and the context of the passage however I could have incorporated more well chosen references to the text
B: 6- I think I did a good job when explaining the effect on the reader when I discussed how the motif of fate created confusion, but I could have been more detailed.
C: 3- I think generally, the IOC was coherent but I don't think that it was entirely effective.
D: 3- My language was adequate but not formal and I should have used more literary terms when analyzing the text. I also did not reach the time mark because my language was limited.
You did a good job with your blog post, and the IOC was very good. I thought that it flowed very well and that you did a great job explaining the full context of your thesis. Your comments about foreshadowing are very significant in this passage and you did a good job of saying how the diction is connected to the foreshadowing. Overall, great IOC.
ReplyDeleteYou did a great job on your IOC! You gave a lot of context about the book and the passage as well as how this was significant. I thought the structure of your IOC was nicely done and easy to follow. You also did a good job at explaining each of the themes and giving relative quotes to analyze with each theme. Overall nice work! :)
ReplyDeleteI thought that your commentary was really sufficient and well done! Your structure was really good and was able to flow through each theme that you had listed. I also really think that your planning was well done and easy for you to follow which is key! I thought that your detailed support was effective in evidence and context.
ReplyDeleteOverall you had a real good analysis of the text as a whole, the only problem was that you didn't really go very deep sometimes. You analysis of the relationship between Macbeth and Banquo was correct, however it felt like you could have gone more in depth into what the text means for them. You had a pretty good showing of literary devices throughout. Also your organization was really good, it seemed like you took your time planning it out. Lastly, your language made sense but it seemed a bit too informal. Overall it was a solid blog post.
ReplyDeleteYour IOC was very easy to follow and cohesive, and I thought that you had a really good amount of context. This helped to set up your thesis and support your claims, and it was good that you established this at the very beginning. I really enjoyed your point of the difference in ambition, but I feel like it could've been explored deeper, because it was pretty surface level. That would've also helped with getting the time up!! I thought you did a very good job of connecting back to your thesis after each point!
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ReplyDelete(I also did really bad on this so I am right there with you haha)
Book ? you mean tragedy or novella
Good context on the passage: which is good
Plot development which is good and main theme of faith
What kind of diction? Everything has diction, negative, positive or ?
I like how you reference the passage but maybe say where on the passage like what line maybe
Organization ah you went back to the beginning maybe better flow ?
A lot of repetition with macbeth's ambition: you said play but at first you kept saying novel
Good connection with what effect it will have on the audience
Fate vs free will? I liked how you talked about this but I feel like you could add more to this, maybe say what you say rather than saying maybe or or
I think you have a great start for your ioc but def could add more
Timing is under 10 minutes which is not good so I think you could pull more from this passage
You got lucky with Macbeth. I thought you had great examples to show the use of ambition in the novel and made great references to the text. But if I had to provide some critic it would be that these are board and more obvious examples. I feel like Macbeth could have deeper meaning and use of figurative language but all people talk about is the theme of ambition. Your IOC was very well organized and would receive a good grade, but in order to get to the next mark band you need a deep analysis.
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ReplyDeleteA: 5
B: 6
C: 3
D: 4
You've got some great feedback here that I really agree with- Kenan and Cindy especially point out what I might suggest to you. I think you'll be totally fine based on this example, be sure to review the IOC resources I gave you- I can tell that will help. I also think we figured out some of the concerns you had about this passage during the IOC review session after school last week.